NO.8

This is Phoebe Lee's writing class blog.

Thursday, May 24, 2007

Computers --- Draft 1

Computer has become one of the most important parts of our life. It is a very useful machine that we can almost do everything by it and connect with the whole world. We can get many novel or career information. One-line chatting is also a function of computer, and we can use the webcam to meet our friends, too. The main purpose of it is making our life more convenient. Shopping on the internet is a good example, so we can buy many things completely with nothing missing without going out. There are too many uses of computer so that I can't tell completely.
However, there is no doubt that computer is the most successful invention in recent years.

On my personal opinion, I have a liking for computers. It brings a lot of entertainments to me. I usually chat with my friend by yahoo massager or in a chat-room. Downloading music is the thing I always do. When I have to write a paper, I will use it. Computer plays an capital role in my life. I can't imagine that I live without it.

7 Comments:

  • At 7:03 PM , Blogger Fanny said...

    "I can't imagine that I live without it."
    may change into
    "I can't imagine that how I can live without it."

     
  • At 10:10 PM , Blogger 娜娜 said...

    "I can't imagine that I live without it." may change into"I can't imagine that how terrible I live without it."

     
  • At 7:42 PM , Blogger Dora said...

    "Computer plays an capital role in my life."--> "an" change to "a".

     
  • At 7:40 PM , Blogger Estella said...

    I usually chat with my friends
    by using yahoo massager or in chat-rooms.
    用多數比較不會被挑毛病

    When I have to write a paper,
    可以形容具體一點!!

     
  • At 8:23 PM , Blogger Jenny said...

    "Computer has become one of the most important parts of our life." should change into "A Computer has become one of the most important parts of our life." or "Computers have become one of the most important parts of our life." is better.

     
  • At 10:38 PM , Blogger 美萱 said...

    "One-line chatting is also a function of computer, "-->"On-line chatting"吧

     
  • At 11:23 AM , Blogger candy said...

    We can have lot of fun on net.especially we can make new friends all over the world.

     

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