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This is Phoebe Lee's writing class blog.

Sunday, September 23, 2007

A Emergency Situation --- Draft 1

I live in Taipei and work as a volunteer in a hospital. It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people. Yesterday morning, an old woman whose clothes was stained with a lot of blood rushed into the hospital. She carried a little boy who seemed to be injured seriously. I put aside the work I was doing and went to her aid immediately. After the nurses and doctors sent the boy to the emergency room, I tried to calm the old woman down and asked her what is going on.

A few second later, she told me that the boy was her grandson. She said that a car with high speed bumped into the boy while they were walking across the street. However, the driver drove away quickly in stead of pulling over and getting out of the car. So, she held her grandson who hurted badly to the hospital without any help. As soon as she finished talking, she burst out into tears. I consoled her and told her that the boy would be fine. Finally, after a three-hour surgery, her grandson had passed the critical phase.

6 Comments:

  • At 5:46 PM , Blogger Sally Sun said...

    in stead of pulling
    instead

    hurted
    hurt-hurt-hurt是三態同型

    good!

     
  • At 8:31 PM , Blogger Fanny said...

    "she burst out into tears"
    you can write
    "she burst out crying"
    "she burst into tears"

     
  • At 6:55 PM , Blogger Jenny said...

    "Yesterday morning, an old woman whose clothes was stained with a lot of blood rushed into the hospital." "was" should change to "were".

     
  • At 10:31 PM , Blogger 娜娜 said...

    鋪陳的不錯
    也是好結局
    但有點薄弱

     
  • At 10:38 PM , Blogger  said...

    This is a story touch my deeply in the heart. It's great.

     
  • At 12:06 AM , Blogger 美萱 said...

    You write very good.
    Is that the real story?

     

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