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Tuesday, January 09, 2007

My Bedroom---Draft 1

My bedroom is rather small but warm.

When you enter my room, you will see my bed first.
The bed is my favorite place in my room, because I can
lie and sleep on it . Next, a big bookshelf is on the wall
on the right side of the bed, and you can also see my
guitar under the bookshelf. My desk is set on the right
wall of my room. There is a window next to my desk.
On the other hand, my dresser is set on the left wall of
my room.

It is approximately my bedroom’s setting.

7 Comments:

  • At 11:36 AM , Blogger candy said...

    "on the other hand" 是說 另一方面
    You can say "And the other side"

     
  • At 11:43 AM , Blogger Dora said...

    "The bed is my favorite place in my room, because I can
    lie and sleep on it." I think the "," can be erased.

     
  • At 11:46 AM , Blogger 娜娜 said...

    *It is approximately my bedroom's setting.*
    I don't know what you mean in this
    sentences.
    But when I read you article I don't think your room is small.
    It's ok.

     
  • At 12:01 PM , Blogger Fanny said...

    It seems that your room is small.
    But it must very comfortable!

     
  • At 11:30 AM , Blogger 美萱 said...

    Good.
    My bed is my favorite place in my room, too.

     
  • At 12:03 PM , Blogger Jenny said...

    your bedroom is small, but it's really confortable.

     
  • At 8:20 PM , Blogger  said...

    Why you use "on the other hand", this is a conjunction.You can try to say other words.
    Your bed looks like very comfortable, I hope can lie on it.

     

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